You have not known what you are.
You have slumbered upon yourself all your life.
Your eyes have been as much as closed most of the time.
What you have done is already in mockeries.

The mockeries are not you.
Underneath them
And within them,
I see you lurk...


-Walt Whitman


3.4.09

before sunrise









Tongues moved in haste

Devouring skins and souls drenched in sweat

Lips collided concealed in the glittering dark

Their sole sanctuary


Love forbidden kindled

Restless in the sounds of blankets

Rustling among whimpers and moans

Torn, undecided, but happy


Whispers in the shadows talked

Divulging stories of lust and love combined

Clammy hands intertwined like snakes

Burning, leaving marks of the night


Fast went the pulses—an attempt to fracture time

Surging blood to veins untangling to the beat of hearts

A remedy worse than the disease

Fatal, deadly, yet gives length to life


The night hid in its shadows

Awaking a chill silence that heeded

The screams of heated bodies crashing in delight

And painful truths written in the lights of dawn


They flew to the heavens towards the stars

Then fell and burned like cigarettes

In their mouths breathing white smoke

Drinking glasses of alcoholic amber-colored lies


Tired salted bodies cuddled on battered bed

Wrapped in white sheets and sex’s fetid smell

Lingering, hovering, smiling in mock indifference

Against the ascending sun—another end


Lips and hands parted unwillingly

Leaving shattered hearts on the crimson-tiled floor

Tears moved in tracks of never-ending grief

From eyes beholding a sunrise they hoped was a sunset






36 comments:

kalansaycollector said...

sarap magsulat talaga no? ;)

RJ said...

Rated R18 by TCMQ! Whew!

Nice, Ron! o”,) Only after reading your piece did I realize that a torrid bed scene could be well-described in a very concise poetry like this!

Why did they wish it’s another sunset?! ...so they can rekindle the night, again?! Huhmn... I don’t think they considered the smell of sex as fetid. It’s their love that stinks; it’s forbidden, you wrote.

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*TCMQ – The Chook-minder’s Quill

Lionheart : Richard the Adventurer said...

Parang may sudden turn ang poem mo ngayon aH!

Its getting mature... Tama ba? or ako lang? hehe :)

Invite kita ulit Ronie!

tickets.and.me said...

wow, this one is ecstatic. you really enjoyed that inspiration, right? heheheh...

jonathan said...

Even the less imaginative can actually envision the tryst in this entry. I like this for its subtle but creative use of words bordering on eroticism and reality.

They say that an experience could make you write them better. I sensed you had some practise, wink, wink.

KRIS JASPER said...

im eating pringles rice infusions while reading this.

and my eyes were super glued to your words, scanning deeply, one by one, searching for clues.

im afraid my comment will reflect my dirty interpretation, but after reading it twice, it really was about forbidden love/sex aint it?

Desert Aquaforce said...

Wow... another great poem. i call your writing, a painting.

I imagined the room where all of these took place... the rising sun beckoning the room's inhabitants to get up!

Anyway, a few hours more and it will be sunset...

Great...great! Keep it up, idol!

Chyng said...

Subtle description of making love. Galing! :D

alex said...

that's how sexy times should be!

personal story? hehe

prinsesamusang said...

wow artistry. i actually did something similar para sa literary folio ng university ang title ay burn. pero mas graphic ang sayo. LOL

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leslie said...

well, i have a very playful imagination, that i have to confess...
i love this post ^_^

Dylan Dimaubusan said...

After minutes of contemplating, I still don't get it, ahahaha! Forgive me.

-That's why I can't and I don't call you mate, ahaha! Ilang beses na nga kong nag confess sa posts ko eh, lolz

Cheers! So nice of you to meet me. Finally. wahahahahahaha!

lucas said...

kalansay collector: masarap talaga! ahehe!

RJ: R-18? Why, O, Why? hehehe!

i think nalilito sila if it's love or lust they're experiencing..ahehe.

thanks, RJ:)

richard: ahehe! it's my first time to write something like this. it felt good kahit papano i could translate it into words...

invite saan? dun sa outing ba?

tickets and me: you bet i did! hahaha! kidding!

jonathan: i wish, mate. i wish. hahaha! but anyway thanks for your generous words...

KJ: i should've added that this post is best read with pringles! ahehehe!

yes. forbidden love and sex it is.

desert aquaforce: ei, i really appreciate your comments and for always dropping by. i apologize if i couldn't do the same. i think there's a problem on your comment box..hmmm...

Chyng: thanks, Chyng! :)

alex: uhmmm...hehehe!...medyo??? hahaha!

prinsesang musang: thanks, mate :) i bet it was a great read:)

poot: hmmm...it'll be danny (most probably)

leslie: thanks, leslie. glad you liked it :)

dylan: gosh...i still can't believe it. ahehe...how could i miss those confessions? frustrated tuloy ako..hehehe!ano yung hindi mo nagets?

REDLAN said...

Kaw gumawa nito? as If i don't know. Based ba to sa real exoerience? As if I don't know it myself.

Galing as always.

Mon said...

i love it! pwedeng pang-poetic section ng FHM. hehe

eli said...

nahuli ako dito ah. bling..bling...iba talaga kapag maraming kang experience..hehehe

one thing i like is that you expressed those (erotic) things into a playful words.

forbidden love ba? kaya pala gusto ninlang magkublis sa dilim ng gabi. hehe

hectic capiznon blogger said...

Sobra mapagdadaming tula naman. huhu. Real like it. :)
You're great man. Keep it up.

Mon said...

i love it. paulit ulit ko talaga binasa. hehe. pang-r18 nga. heheh.. astig ang mga words!! hehe

Leoj said...

o dapat may sequel 'to tulad ng pelikulang before sunrise. at saka, gawin mo na ring before sunset ang title para cool. haha.

I'll wait for that. :D

Dylan Dimaubusan said...

The last part left me hanging.

A moment of bliss and ecstasy then suddenly biglang may shattered hearts, tears, grief...

And why before sunrise?!?!?!

Ahahahahaha!

Lance said...

i think they have said it all already...
nice piece...you're truly an artist dude..
Have a nice holy week!

ShatterShards said...

Sometime, the things forbidden are the most enjoyable, and they are best enjoyed under the cover of night. hehehe

No movie inspiration this time? Real-life inspiration, I guess? hehe

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I haven't see the Onion Movie. I think you're only the second person to tell me na may ganoon. hehe

Umm... walang inputs is unacceptable, pero mas maganda pa rin sana kung may outputs.

vanvan said...

"The screams of heated bodies crashing in delight"

---nawindang ako..hindi naman pala malandi pakinggan ang isang ganitong scene kapag ka galing sa puso't isip ni lucas..

wala kanang pinatawad..pero da best pa rin..

kcatwoman said...

oo nga mature na sya.
i wish i knew the real story why their love was forbidden and they had shed tears at the end. pakibigyang linaw ron.

pugadmaya said...

ay ang galing.. :D nakapag post na din ako ng poem na ganito pero mas maganda at descriptive ang sa'yo..siguro mas matindi ang inspiration mo nang ginawa mo yan..haha..nice one

Naomee said...

Hi just passing by :)

Allen Yuarata said...

Ooooh! Poetry. my greatest frustrations. But you got me mesmerized by this one. Thanks!

lucas said...

Red: thanks, Red :P medyo lang. Ahehe!

Mon: my poetry section bas a FHM? Ahahaha! Thanks :P Pang-18 ba? I made it subtle nagbabakasaling maginng GP ang rating. Hahaha! Napaisip ako tuloy kung meron akong reader na minor..ahehe!

Eli: Thanks, eli :P

Hectic capiznon blogger: Thanks, mate :) I appreciate you dropping by :P

Dylan: kasi babalik na sila sa sari-sarili nilang buhay…uwi na daw sa mga asawa nila. Haha :P

Lance: thanks, Lance :) Enjoy the holy week too… :P

Shatts: [Sometime, the things forbidden are the most enjoyable, and they are best enjoyed under the cover of night. Hehehe]---It makes the experience full of excitement. Hahaha!

Real life experience? A little bit! Haha! :P

Try to watch it then. Baka ma-enjoy mo. may pagka-KJ kasi ako minsan. Haha!

Nako, mate. Nahawa na yata ako sayo. Wala rin akong outputs these past days..hays…

Van: I intentionally made it subtle. Gusto kong ma-maintain pagiging wholesome ng site ko. Ahahaha! Thanks, van :P

Kcatwoman: I don’t know the real story. The scene just popped in my head. ahehe! Thanks, flor. :P

Red: thanks, Red :P medyo lang. Ahehe!

Mon: my poetry section bas a FHM? Ahahaha! Thanks :P Pang-18 ba? I made it subtle nagbabakasaling maginng GP ang rating. Hahaha! Napaisip ako tuloy kung meron akong reader na minor..ahehe!

Eli: Thanks, eli :P

Hectic capiznon blogger: Thanks, mate :) I appreciate you dropping by :P

Dylan: kasi babalik na sila sa sari-sarili nilang buhay…uwi na daw sa mga asawa nila. Haha :P

Lance: thanks, Lance :) Enjoy the holy week too… :P

Shatts: [Sometime, the things forbidden are the most enjoyable, and they are best enjoyed under the cover of night. Hehehe]---It makes the experience full of excitement. Hahaha!

Real life experience? A little bit! Haha! :P

Try to watch it then. Baka ma-enjoy mo. may pagka-KJ kasi ako minsan. Haha!

Nako, mate. Nahawa na yata ako sayo. Wala rin akong outputs these past days..hays…

Van: I intentionally made it subtle. Gusto kong ma-maintain pagiging wholesome ng site ko. Ahahaha! Thanks, van :P

Kcatwoman: I don’t know the real story. The scene just popped in my head. ahehe! Thanks, flor. :P

lucas said...

pugad-maya: ahehe... thanks. what do you mean by mas matindi ang inspiration? ahahaha! kidding!

naome: thanks for the drop :P

allen: thanks, allen :)

Ely said...

censored...ndi pd sa minor tulad ko! hehehe. Curious lang, before sunrise talaga ginawa? :)

lucas said...

ely: hahaha! malaswa ba? haha!

oo. bakit naman hindi?haha! :P

KRIS JASPER said...

Your "frozen" theme gave me an idea on what to publish today...

Enjoy!

lucas said...

KJ: haha! kaya ba nanigas to death yung gurdy fish ni prince paul??? hahaha! nice one! hahaha!

Anonymous said...

nakarelate ako dito ah..

acdee said...

maganda yang before sunrise...yahahaha...naku ha..rated R to..i say...rated A++++++++..as always...keep your pen crying...=) cheers!