Tongues moved in haste
Devouring skins and souls drenched in sweat
Lips collided concealed in the glittering dark
Their sole sanctuary
Restless in the sounds of blankets
Rustling among whimpers and moans
Torn, undecided, but happy
Whispers in the shadows talked
Divulging stories of lust and love combined
Clammy hands intertwined like snakes
Burning, leaving marks of the night
Fast went the pulses—an attempt to fracture time
Surging blood to veins untangling to the beat of hearts
A remedy worse than the disease
Fatal, deadly, yet gives length to life
Awaking a chill silence that heeded
The screams of heated bodies crashing in delight
And painful truths written in the lights of dawn
They flew to the heavens towards the stars
Then fell and burned like cigarettes
In their mouths breathing white smoke
Drinking glasses of alcoholic amber-colored lies
Wrapped in white sheets and sex’s fetid smell
Lingering, hovering, smiling in mock indifference
Against the ascending sun—another end
Leaving shattered hearts on the crimson-tiled floor
Tears moved in tracks of never-ending grief
From eyes beholding a sunrise they hoped was a sunset
36 comments:
sarap magsulat talaga no? ;)
Rated R18 by TCMQ! Whew!
Nice, Ron! o”,) Only after reading your piece did I realize that a torrid bed scene could be well-described in a very concise poetry like this!
Why did they wish it’s another sunset?! ...so they can rekindle the night, again?! Huhmn... I don’t think they considered the smell of sex as fetid. It’s their love that stinks; it’s forbidden, you wrote.
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*TCMQ – The Chook-minder’s Quill
Parang may sudden turn ang poem mo ngayon aH!
Its getting mature... Tama ba? or ako lang? hehe :)
Invite kita ulit Ronie!
wow, this one is ecstatic. you really enjoyed that inspiration, right? heheheh...
Even the less imaginative can actually envision the tryst in this entry. I like this for its subtle but creative use of words bordering on eroticism and reality.
They say that an experience could make you write them better. I sensed you had some practise, wink, wink.
im eating pringles rice infusions while reading this.
and my eyes were super glued to your words, scanning deeply, one by one, searching for clues.
im afraid my comment will reflect my dirty interpretation, but after reading it twice, it really was about forbidden love/sex aint it?
Wow... another great poem. i call your writing, a painting.
I imagined the room where all of these took place... the rising sun beckoning the room's inhabitants to get up!
Anyway, a few hours more and it will be sunset...
Great...great! Keep it up, idol!
Subtle description of making love. Galing! :D
that's how sexy times should be!
personal story? hehe
wow artistry. i actually did something similar para sa literary folio ng university ang title ay burn. pero mas graphic ang sayo. LOL
i think Lil will be the next AI. what you think? visit my blog @ tsilspat.blogspot.com.
well, i have a very playful imagination, that i have to confess...
i love this post ^_^
After minutes of contemplating, I still don't get it, ahahaha! Forgive me.
-That's why I can't and I don't call you mate, ahaha! Ilang beses na nga kong nag confess sa posts ko eh, lolz
Cheers! So nice of you to meet me. Finally. wahahahahahaha!
kalansay collector: masarap talaga! ahehe!
RJ: R-18? Why, O, Why? hehehe!
i think nalilito sila if it's love or lust they're experiencing..ahehe.
thanks, RJ:)
richard: ahehe! it's my first time to write something like this. it felt good kahit papano i could translate it into words...
invite saan? dun sa outing ba?
tickets and me: you bet i did! hahaha! kidding!
jonathan: i wish, mate. i wish. hahaha! but anyway thanks for your generous words...
KJ: i should've added that this post is best read with pringles! ahehehe!
yes. forbidden love and sex it is.
desert aquaforce: ei, i really appreciate your comments and for always dropping by. i apologize if i couldn't do the same. i think there's a problem on your comment box..hmmm...
Chyng: thanks, Chyng! :)
alex: uhmmm...hehehe!...medyo??? hahaha!
prinsesang musang: thanks, mate :) i bet it was a great read:)
poot: hmmm...it'll be danny (most probably)
leslie: thanks, leslie. glad you liked it :)
dylan: gosh...i still can't believe it. ahehe...how could i miss those confessions? frustrated tuloy ako..hehehe!ano yung hindi mo nagets?
Kaw gumawa nito? as If i don't know. Based ba to sa real exoerience? As if I don't know it myself.
Galing as always.
i love it! pwedeng pang-poetic section ng FHM. hehe
nahuli ako dito ah. bling..bling...iba talaga kapag maraming kang experience..hehehe
one thing i like is that you expressed those (erotic) things into a playful words.
forbidden love ba? kaya pala gusto ninlang magkublis sa dilim ng gabi. hehe
Sobra mapagdadaming tula naman. huhu. Real like it. :)
You're great man. Keep it up.
i love it. paulit ulit ko talaga binasa. hehe. pang-r18 nga. heheh.. astig ang mga words!! hehe
o dapat may sequel 'to tulad ng pelikulang before sunrise. at saka, gawin mo na ring before sunset ang title para cool. haha.
I'll wait for that. :D
The last part left me hanging.
A moment of bliss and ecstasy then suddenly biglang may shattered hearts, tears, grief...
And why before sunrise?!?!?!
Ahahahahaha!
i think they have said it all already...
nice piece...you're truly an artist dude..
Have a nice holy week!
Sometime, the things forbidden are the most enjoyable, and they are best enjoyed under the cover of night. hehehe
No movie inspiration this time? Real-life inspiration, I guess? hehe
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I haven't see the Onion Movie. I think you're only the second person to tell me na may ganoon. hehe
Umm... walang inputs is unacceptable, pero mas maganda pa rin sana kung may outputs.
"The screams of heated bodies crashing in delight"
---nawindang ako..hindi naman pala malandi pakinggan ang isang ganitong scene kapag ka galing sa puso't isip ni lucas..
wala kanang pinatawad..pero da best pa rin..
oo nga mature na sya.
i wish i knew the real story why their love was forbidden and they had shed tears at the end. pakibigyang linaw ron.
ay ang galing.. :D nakapag post na din ako ng poem na ganito pero mas maganda at descriptive ang sa'yo..siguro mas matindi ang inspiration mo nang ginawa mo yan..haha..nice one
Hi just passing by :)
Ooooh! Poetry. my greatest frustrations. But you got me mesmerized by this one. Thanks!
Red: thanks, Red :P medyo lang. Ahehe!
Mon: my poetry section bas a FHM? Ahahaha! Thanks :P Pang-18 ba? I made it subtle nagbabakasaling maginng GP ang rating. Hahaha! Napaisip ako tuloy kung meron akong reader na minor..ahehe!
Eli: Thanks, eli :P
Hectic capiznon blogger: Thanks, mate :) I appreciate you dropping by :P
Dylan: kasi babalik na sila sa sari-sarili nilang buhay…uwi na daw sa mga asawa nila. Haha :P
Lance: thanks, Lance :) Enjoy the holy week too… :P
Shatts: [Sometime, the things forbidden are the most enjoyable, and they are best enjoyed under the cover of night. Hehehe]---It makes the experience full of excitement. Hahaha!
Real life experience? A little bit! Haha! :P
Try to watch it then. Baka ma-enjoy mo. may pagka-KJ kasi ako minsan. Haha!
Nako, mate. Nahawa na yata ako sayo. Wala rin akong outputs these past days..hays…
Van: I intentionally made it subtle. Gusto kong ma-maintain pagiging wholesome ng site ko. Ahahaha! Thanks, van :P
Kcatwoman: I don’t know the real story. The scene just popped in my head. ahehe! Thanks, flor. :P
Red: thanks, Red :P medyo lang. Ahehe!
Mon: my poetry section bas a FHM? Ahahaha! Thanks :P Pang-18 ba? I made it subtle nagbabakasaling maginng GP ang rating. Hahaha! Napaisip ako tuloy kung meron akong reader na minor..ahehe!
Eli: Thanks, eli :P
Hectic capiznon blogger: Thanks, mate :) I appreciate you dropping by :P
Dylan: kasi babalik na sila sa sari-sarili nilang buhay…uwi na daw sa mga asawa nila. Haha :P
Lance: thanks, Lance :) Enjoy the holy week too… :P
Shatts: [Sometime, the things forbidden are the most enjoyable, and they are best enjoyed under the cover of night. Hehehe]---It makes the experience full of excitement. Hahaha!
Real life experience? A little bit! Haha! :P
Try to watch it then. Baka ma-enjoy mo. may pagka-KJ kasi ako minsan. Haha!
Nako, mate. Nahawa na yata ako sayo. Wala rin akong outputs these past days..hays…
Van: I intentionally made it subtle. Gusto kong ma-maintain pagiging wholesome ng site ko. Ahahaha! Thanks, van :P
Kcatwoman: I don’t know the real story. The scene just popped in my head. ahehe! Thanks, flor. :P
pugad-maya: ahehe... thanks. what do you mean by mas matindi ang inspiration? ahahaha! kidding!
naome: thanks for the drop :P
allen: thanks, allen :)
censored...ndi pd sa minor tulad ko! hehehe. Curious lang, before sunrise talaga ginawa? :)
ely: hahaha! malaswa ba? haha!
oo. bakit naman hindi?haha! :P
Your "frozen" theme gave me an idea on what to publish today...
Enjoy!
KJ: haha! kaya ba nanigas to death yung gurdy fish ni prince paul??? hahaha! nice one! hahaha!
nakarelate ako dito ah..
maganda yang before sunrise...yahahaha...naku ha..rated R to..i say...rated A++++++++..as always...keep your pen crying...=) cheers!
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