Shed those tears on the ground or
Eat the same dust from your mouth
Sing me a sad song—
The lyrics on your ashes I spoke.
Like I am your greatest fear
In your bed, a mortal foe
Stay awake or sleep forevermore.
Scarlet like a dying sun, as dead as your love
Fall hard on the earth where I stood
Like a rootless tree barren of fruits.
Run for me in haste for your life
Drink sweat if you thirst
From the bottle filled with yourself—
A lost taste lasting on my tongue.
That I promise to never read
Let an unkindness send them not a murder
For good fortune to me they will bring.
But stab my heart first as if I have not died
Dig our holes, with your hands as spades
Bury me with you, my darling
And this anger as lights from our eyes fade.
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Why so negative, Ron?
This one's too heavy for brisk reading, I have to read it again after I've gone home from the office.
And why must the letter be delivered by an unkindness of ravens and not a murder of crows? I'm not too familiar with the Raven's mythology, though. The Crow, on the other hand can guide the dead back into the living; the opposite of the sparrow that guides the recently dead into the afterlife.
nako mate, hindi ko rin alam eh... this was once a draft i've written a month ago i think. when i write poetry, basta lang sila lumalabas! hehehe!
sa one tree hill ko nakuha yung idea. a single raven is a bad omen. an unkindness is a sign of good fortune. Really? they guide the dead back to the living... it makes sense! :)
The words are rich and powerful but the imagery is startling. I sensed combined feelings of love undying and remorse. Where do you get inspirations?
jon: yeah...i agree with you. the words startled even me when i wrote this a month ago. i'm not sure where the inspiration came from. they just came to me one night while listening to this song by deathcab.
Ayos, nilalaro mo talaga ng husto ang mga salita... this entry speaks more about 'death', but your brilliant words have brought the story back to life!
[Kailangan ko lang nga konting background... Yong tulad ng mga literatures sa high school textbooks natin (hahaha!) na may intro muna about the author, history nung isinulat ang isang piece, etc. Siguro mas kikilabutan pa ako. o",) ]
so I found another poet..nice.nice.ho
very interesting verses Lucas, it makes me think of angry make-up sex.... but that's probably revealing too much of my psyche hehe...
it also makes me think of "never go to bed angry" and that following your love into the darkness into which she goes, whether that be death or some other darkness, is one of the zeniths of chivalry or a measure of true love.
cheers man!
Now I'm inspired again to write poems!
galing!
So, the poem ended up with your "darling" turning as a zombie?
killing, stabbing....
Hmmm.... I like it!!!!!!!
Creepy...very, very creepy.
This darling of yours, you love her and yet this love can also turn into hatred.
I think I wanna dedicate this to someone.
A bouquet of flowers I give to you
Scarlet like a dying sun, as dead as your love
Fall hard on the earth where I stood
Like a rootless tree barren of fruits.
-love this part, but you could probably change the scene of the sunset and scarlet in dwelling into your emotions. i find it over rated.
but aside from that, you still leave me breathless with your words.
just my two cents...
very well-written bro, kaso it's parang full of anger and bitterness. based on experience huh? ;)
LUCAS!!!!!!!
KAKAIBA KA TALAGA. :)
Nice poem, hanggang kaibubuturan ang dating.
"Then kill yourself as if you’re alive
But stab my heart first as if I have not died"
Like this line!! :)
RJ: nako huwag mo na hingiin ang background ko. hehe! you'll just get bored. my blog is open for decoding so. makes blogging so much fun! :)
havenlei: ...and i found you :)
angelo: really? you actually thought of angry make-up sex?! hahaha! that's interesting...but really far away from what i was trying to convey with the words...well, words are insufficient sometimes...
thanks, doc :)
moongoddesslae: cool! you should write one right now :) thanks for dropping by :)
KJ: [So, the poem ended up with your "darling" turning as a zombie?]
yeah! that's exactly what happened in the end! hehehe!
i knew you'd like it because of the gory words..hehe! peace out!
jei: sometimes when a heart gets broken, the heart is torn between those two occupants...anger and love...
kanino mo naman dedicated? hehehe! peace out!
ewik: thanks for your two cents ewik! i really appreciate it! :)
mon: nako hindi! huwag naman sana...Hahaha! peace out!
josh: thanks, Josh :)
red: thanks, red :)
homer: thanks for leaving your sentiments :)
Interesting! CLAP CLAP CLAP!
NOSEBLEEB ako dun... aka Epistaxis!
Interesting! CLAP CLAP CLAP!
NOSEBLEED ako dun... aka Epistaxis!
sa female boss ko...shhhh wag ka maingay, hehehehe.
You know, you are one of the best weaver of words I have ever met. We have the same style when it comes to poetry. When I write poems, the words just flow freely through my mind and rush through my paper. Haha! I thought that was uncanny. It was unusual for words to simply flow through your brain, make sense and make a rhyme. But then, the best thing about it is that, other people appreciate your craft.
By the way, I love sad poems like this one. =)
the poem's so depressing yet my mouth is still gaping on how you carry out and execute those words!
Very nice written but it's full of bitterness. Love, hate and longing combined.
I wish you well. ^_^
love it!
;)
lucas said: when i write poetry, basta lang sila lumalabas! hehehe!
so sinasapian ka din pala pag nagsusulat :D...hehe
it's the title that really intrigued me...ganda ng poem...
rose pastillas bouquet, gusto mo ng contact? (baka gusto ni hailey!)
very interesting ang powerful words.
buntunan ba to ng poot at kabiguan? hehe
alam mo, parang si adam lambert tong material na to. unpredictable kung saan biglang kukulot.
i like the way you play with words hehe, i lost that ability with my job.
chard: epistaxis ba? squeeze the nares and lean forward. GO! hehe! thanks, chard.
jei: hahaha! isusumbong kita sa boss mo. hehe! kidding :P thanks for always sharing your sentiments :)
RCryan: wow... thanks for the generous compliment, my friend :) i thought it's uncanny, really. but not anymore kasi dalawa na tayo! hehehe! it's curious how words just materialize in your head sometimes. it's a thrill to successfully immortalize them on print.
i love sad poems too. sadness is a good inspiration when i write.
desert aquaforce: thanks for sharing your sentiments, sir :) i really appreciate it. good thing you changed your comment box. i can leave comments at last! hehe!
God bless you :)
snow: thanks for the comment, snow :)...and for dropping by. I wish you well too...
najua: thanks, mate :)
leslie: yeah! hehe! madalas kapag twilight at kapag nakikinig ng music. hehe! ayun...
thanks ulit! :)
chyng: sige! penge ako! saan ba nakakabili niyan? hmmm... :)
eli: salamat, parekoy!
languagers int'l: i like the adam lambert analogy! hehehe! thanks. but i was rooing for Kris though. hehe!
you each languages right? why did you lose it? hmmm... i guess teaching language and writing doesn't really go parallel to each other...
I told you I was revealing too much of my psyche haha! words are often interpreted according to the colour of the tint on our glasses I guess. Ya words can be insufficient at times, especially English words because it can be such an imprecise language.... leaving lots of room for poetic license. keep it up!
oh, and when they don't bite is when it's relaxing hehe... I guess you don't like sushi then!
Yeah, I so love and hate her at the same time. I don't know why is that, hehehehe. Ever since I stumbled on your blog, I became hooked to it and kept coming back.
Napakinggan ko na rin ng buo ang Deathcab song mo... Astig! Talaga ngang mapapasulat ka ng poem about death. hehe
Yep, the Crow can sometimes bring the dead back into the living. He's also a trickster god.
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Ano namang klaseng urges ang naisip mo, Ron? hehe
Yeah, kahit wala sa budget, napabili ako ng libro. Matagal ko na kasing nakita sa Powerbooks yung mga iyon, e nung nakita ko sa Booksale at Buy-the-Book, hindi ko na pinalampas. Just bought plastic cover last night, siguro mamaya, magbalot na ako ng books.
Gabriel Garcia Marquez... hindi naman kaya One Hundred Years of Solitude iyang binabasa mo? Love that book, pero na-depress ako sa ending.
Cheers!
angelo: thanks, angelo! :)
nope. i don't eat sushi. hehe! it's the smell that make me lose my appetite for it. :P
thanks for always dropping by. peace out!
jei: wow! you're really torn, aren't ya! hehehe! thanks again :)
shatts: hahaha! sexual urge! :P paulit-ulit kasi sa balita ang kho-halili scandal! haha!
ahh...i see. thanks for that info :D
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Nasa sa booksale! Hays...i love that place. good books for less prices. tambay ako dun lagi at national bookstore.
nope. love in the time of cholera. i was intrigued bacause it was the book in the movie "serendipity", where kate left her name and number. hehe!
Cheers!
It's very well-written and very E-M-O. I hope you're fine. Your blog's name is very connected with this post. :)
I wish I can write like you.. hehe
elay: are you kidding? you're a great writer, elay! otherwise you'll not land on my rivercourt. :)
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I'm fine, Rhaingel :) Thanks.Emo lang talaga ako. hehe!
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